I quite like your poem. Two things I would like to mention:
transitory is not a word you would use for the coming and going of flowers. Maybe fleeting is a better word. Second, you write about a broken cycle that has no hope for a new beginning. I wonder. Is it not the breaking out of a cycle that would allow us a new start in whatever....? Going round and round in circles will bring us nowhere. Stopping it, offers all the chances there are.
Still, as I said. I quite like your lines.
Antwort von Daniel Ratzeburg (15.12.2001)
Hi Andreas! Thanx for your comment.
Here we go: I wrote cycle in the meaning of life. In
my thoughts life sometimes is a cycle. We will die
and return in another way of existence. A cycle
which goes round and round. Surely I don´t know
but sometimes I wish it would be so. Just some
thoughts about what comes next....i mean after
our so called death. A broken cycle would be the
end for all time. Greetings, Daniel